Talk:My War/GA1

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Reviewer: Retrohead (talk · contribs) 20:42, 29 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

With no other significant duties, I'll take this one. I suppose there won't be much for correction, but I'll give it a detailed read-through.--Retrohead (talk) 20:42, 29 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Background

resulting in five days in jail–the second "in" is not needed, if I'm correct.
- It could be "in jail" or "of jail", but "five days jail" won't work. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 00:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Following the release of Damaged Black Flag...comma between the album and the band
- Done'. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 00:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Shouldn't "new approaches" and "new sounds" be singular?
- I don't think that would be appropriate for this album—Black Flag didn't have a uniform approach or "sound" like many bands strive for. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 00:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
in Germany during a European tour in 1983→"during the 1983 European tour in Germany" (the second one sounds better to me)
- I'm not sure I can call it "the" European tour—the band often did multiple tours per year. I can't find a source at the moment that lists their tours to make sure. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 00:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Reception and legacy

"My War was but the first release by the band in 1984"–I assume the italicized word here is extra.
- In this case, "but" is supposed to mean "only". I've reworded to make it clearer. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 00:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Also, what happened to the album's length in the 'track listing' section? Is it not supposed to be at the end of the track list anymore?
- Looking at the template documentation, it looks like it's optional. I don't see an example of how it's done with LPs—should I do it for it side, or just for the whole album? Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 00:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Other formal stuff

The prose looks professionally written and easy to understand.
Images and audio files are properly licensed and their use is justified.
The sources are books and online reviews by reputed music websites/magazines, acceptable for GA level.
Without further ado, I pronounce this for good article. Curly Turkey, you may add another "G" tag at your profile. Solid work.--Retrohead (talk) 19:52, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]